There's no THERE there. How to engage readers with active verbs.
Whenever you see "there" you usually have a passive verb. Except when "there" is a place, as in "over there." Word search for "there" and you can cut a lot of passive verbs and make your writing more engaging for readers.
Example 1: There are storm clouds on the horizon.
This sentence doesn’t convey much.
Example 2: Storm clouds loom on the horizon.
Better? Sense of foreboding?
Example 3: Black storm clouds boil over the horizon.
Compare Example 3 to Example 1.
Which is stronger? Why? Which is active rather than passive? Which one is easier for a reader to visualize?
‘Nuff said.
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